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You’re so far away but so real my dear
I go to sleep to dream and to see you clearly
To quiet my mind and to know that you love me
And in the morning I wake
To the sound of your voice on the phone
But I had just spent the night alone
So for days and days it’s something repeating
Most of the time I’m okay, I swear
Even though my heart’s weeping
Especially during those times that are creeping
Around the corner, they’re misleading
I have to stay strong, it’s unbearably tough
After so many weeks I’ve about had enough
But boy it’s so worth it when we finally touch
I look into your eyes, they’re so green
Who am I kidding, you’re only on the screen
This long distance thing is harder than it seems
I scream, I sigh, and I cry
Though I know you’re mine, all mine
It’s about time you understood these lines
More than words, they’re my thoughts
Bleeding from inside
I can’t hide them no more
Won’t you come walking through my door
And let me know for sure?
Cause I’m completely yours
You’re so far away but so real my dear
Even though it’s so, I still hold you near
Hear me out, wipe my tears away
Please help me get through today

title: You're So Far Away
by: Luana Lani
title: You're So Far Away
by: Luana Lani [link]
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:iconinufreak4ever:
InuFreak4Ever Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
my feels </3
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bobmarquis2002 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
What a touching poem ... anyone who has been separated from a loved one can feel the passion ... and the sorrow.

I can't help but think you had someone special in mind when you wrote it.
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runswithwind Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012  Professional General Artist
Aloha Luana

I always knew there was more to you than just a beautiful girl....now I see!
Amazing, I am going thru that right now, my girl is in PI..........wow, you nailed it!
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luanalani Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012
Thank you very much for the kind words!
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Valedhelven Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2011
Another well-written piece... my only regret is that you don't write more often :typerhappy: Don't get me wrong - you know how much I love your modeling work, too - lol! But there is another beautiful side to you that most people would never get to see unless they read your poetry... :hug:
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luanalani Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011
Thank you!
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sometimesnooneknows Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
a very beautiful poem luana
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luanalani Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011
Thank you for reading.
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sometimesnooneknows Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
ur welcome
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RoseByAnyOtherName Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2010
i know the feeling. i'm in college and my best guy friend is back at home. i miss him sooo much but we skype a lot. :)
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:iconluanalani:
luanalani Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2010
Awww :heart:
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meanderingDreams Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2010  Student General Artist
Beautiful poem! Brava! :clap:
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:iconluanalani:
luanalani Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2010
Thank you for reading!
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Wolfman13F Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Love it. reminds me of the song "Far Away" by Pohaku
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:iconluanalani:
luanalani Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2010
Thanks! Never heard of that song...I'll have to check it out.
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Wolfman13F Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Pohaku - Far Away
[link]
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BlueDagron Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2010
Very beautiful work, lass. It is very well written, and full of explicit emotion.
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:iconluanalani:
luanalani Featured By Owner May 19, 2010
Thank you for reading :)
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:iconbluedagron:
BlueDagron Featured By Owner May 27, 2010
You are very welcome. ^___^
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BlueDagron Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
Very nicely done; it flows beautifully and naturally.
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:iconbluedagron:
BlueDagron Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
Very nicely done; it flows beautifully and naturally.
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:iconbluedagron:
BlueDagron Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
Very nicely done; it flows beautifully and naturally.
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KINCHENart Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nice work!!!!!
Very artistic poem....
It must be hard to miss someone you love
So much!!!
I'm sure after reading this they will understand!!
Great work
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soldierboy129 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
holy fuck, wow you just wrote basically what my girlfriend told me lolz, im in the army so im often away. havent seen her sense January as is
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emporergallen Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009
I never knew you felt so strong about me. :D
Seriously though I love your poem, the raw emotion just comes right of the page. Great work.
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Valedhelven Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009
lol - you are too funny :D
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009   Writer
Great stuff, I love your word usage!! :) You are a very fascinating Lady!!! Stop by my page sometime and read some of my poetry, you are always welcome :)
Ben
Hello from Texas
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lilmissbella Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009
wow this is so beautiful i absolutely love this
alot of it reminds me of him and i
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:icondej22:
dej22 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009
Damn that is really good. Again you nee to really put of a book of your poems
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nate-fuego Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009
feel thee emotion in your
words..

continue..
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:iconwerretaler:
werretaler Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009
so beautiful Luana!
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ronnvampire Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009
yiheeeeee! *kindat kindat
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LuvsLiesLullabies Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009
I absolutely love this, it reminds me of someone I hold so close and so dear, and have yet to meet...we talk constantly and have done for going on 2 years. But someday....when the time is right.
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gillian-raine Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
I could not have described our situation any better.
Thank you for lending my heart the words it needs to say.
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nemesis222 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Impressive!!
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Jack-Skellington-3 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009
Beautiful absolutely beautiful!!!
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ArtisanAlchemist Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009
That was beautiful!
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JoergJohannMueller Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Wonderful work my dear. So much feelings you put into those wonderful word. I send you a big hug :hug: because you share them with us.
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karanua Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I know that feeling very well. Nicely composed.
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SirMartin1 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
this has soul dear real soul, it ripples with waves of life and love. :)
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kosepa Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
beautiful, you're a great poet
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Ean-Sze Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
know of this feeling !
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KageNova Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009
I love this deeply it also reminds me of my relationship. My fiance' lives in the Philippines, and I'm in Georgia, Were literally half a world from one another. Just to see her face to face right now is hard. The plane ride alone would take me a day almost to get there. But were hanging in there and fighting for every moment we can.
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bshuffett Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009
This is so beautiful and it reminds me of my relationship. My fiance lives in California, and I live in Kentucky. I either have to drive 31 1/2 hours, or jump on a plane for 7 hours just to see her. However, we are getting married in Vegas in December! :.)
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